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Tuesday, June 2, 2020

The Night Thieves

On one night I see the night thieves. I follow them down the road and they go into a dark scary house. I see what they are doing through the window. I called the police and they said that it was abandoned. I got out of my car and went Bang!! I hear something I run outside. I'm so scared I go back in and there it is gold and money I see that there is a gang of them. I wonder if my watch is in there and I finally saw it. When the cops arrived. The police said “get on the ground” they said “Don’t kill us” the thieves went and they ran out the back door. I ran after them but they got away so next time I see them I will run after them.      

The End
       

1 comment:

  1. Kia ora Toby,

    It is great to see you have used correct punctuation throughout your text, ka pai!
    I love how you included a picture for your writing.
    Perhaps next time you could end your story with a cliffhanger.

    Keep up the great work!

    :)

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